Page 8 - Lesson Notes

The letter below contains several spellings, grammar, style and layout mistakes.
Highlight the mistakes, or areas where something is missing, then rewrite the letter
correctly. [write in your notebook]
 List the mistakes in the style of writing and format of the formal letter.
 Make changes to the letter to make it formal with required vocabulary, sentence structure,
layout, paragraphing, greeting and closure).

DELHI SAFDARJUNG MARG

New Delhi

The Manager

BBSPL Inventory Management software

13.3.2020

Hi Sir!

Sales manager

Modern Software system
Kullberg plaza

Lahore

Stock Control Softwar System

Hope you are doing fine. Thank you for your letter of 4 th of March and the informaon you sent
regarding the stock control system offered by your company. I certainly feel the system will meet our
requirments. However, there are some points which I would like to clarefy before we go ahead and
order the system.

Firstly, although you mentioned that the system has recently updated, I wondered whether we might
be iligible for a discount on any future upgrades.

I would be very greatful for a swift responce to this queries, in order that we can begin the proces as
soon as possible.

Secondly, the instalation and implementation period of three weeks, to which you refer in your letter,
seems rather long. Is there any posibility of getting the system up and running on a shorter timescale?

Yours lovingly,

Thank you in advance for your assistanse. I look forward to your reply.

Good bye

Husain Ahmed
 Activity 4. (writing skill)